Saturday, May 16, 2009

Love Blind



"We aren't meant to be. never..." she said, devastating him.

Days passed..
He rang her  "come to my place. once, for oldtimes sake..."

She came.
"Come in.."

silence swamped them.
"What do you want..??" she asked.
"I just want you to be present"
He slit his throat.
She died for the rest of her life...


P.S- My first attempt at 55 fiction...hope it came out good...
55 fiction is completing a story within 55 words....i'm in love with this genre..

17 comments:

Devilish Angel said...

Too gory :( Gave me the shivers. May be that is the intention?

Arun Kumar said...

@develish angel
yeap...that was the intention...

Asit Dhal said...

sad ending....nice fiction !!!!

msatheeshkumar said...

Hey Arun I'm astonished to see ur talent in fiction.Really a nice one. btw I'm still trying to post a topic regarding that number tag. I'll surely post that in another two days or so.

Arun Kumar said...

@asit..
yeah...sadistic ending..

@satheesh
thanks for the compliments dude..
jus do that tag leisurely man...

Rose said...

you know what dude??
I really need a lot of grey cells to get a fiction 55, that's y I cant even write them!!

Nicely written:)

Sandeep Balan said...

o doc saar....what an attempt bro...you pulled off a brilliant one arun...i feel it would have been better if you would have ended the post where he slits his throat...that would have been like a killer....cheers!

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Arun Kumar said...

@rose
grey cells... screy cells...nothing like hat rose...

@sandeep....
thank u bro...
thanks for stopping by my blog dude...

Zendagi Migzara said...

Hey Arun,

I really fell for this narration.. Painful portrayed subtly but with a blasting effect...

Simply loved the revenge/ madness involved..

I had left a comment in WL also on this very post.. Greatjob dude!!

Nyx said...

OMG! What a post! Sadistic ending, but perfect! :)

Cheers

*PEACE*

Arun Kumar said...

@Zendagi migzara

Thank u very very much...
U r very generous with ur appreciations... :-)

Arun Kumar said...

@aarthi

Thanks Artie...sadistic indeed...

Bala said...

Terrific ending da... but u brought out the slavour u want to tell us...

Arun Kumar said...

@bala
thanks rajus...glad to impress u..

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

f u. that was bitchy to say the least. whats the point of love if there is no sacrifice?
very well written anyways. i really didnt know what happened till you brought down the axe.

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

ps: pardon the language. :)

Arun Kumar said...

@scarlet
he he... ur comments are very much appreciated man... i dont mind the language.. :-D
thanks man...
he he.. yeah it was bitchy... that why the story... just fiction...